Friday, January 2, 2009

Daughter of the Sun - a Review

I downloaded Daughter of the Sun by Lonnie Ezell from iTunes, it cost around $5 to read on my iPhone.

I really enjoyed the story. It's about a woman, Elena, who was raised in a village that hates her because she wears the 'red', (she has red hair and is thought to have magic as did her mother). Elena is bitter over her treatment, over her mothers death and is determined to provide a better life for her daughter.

The magic is used by the "Breathe" - a great concept where a person breaths in, but in so doing, sucks the life out of something else, the earth, the trees, themselves, other people . . .

The evil Overlord needs a fresh thirteen children so he sends his son, the Duke to collect them. The Duke has some other plans in mind and also abducts Elena's daughter.

The story is about Elena's efforts to rescue her daughter and in the end save the world. The story bounces mainly between her journey and that of her husband's, Johan. Narrative also includes her daughter's point of view, and a few other characters which was easy to follow.

The main distraction from the story was the writing. Too many comments like 'rage boiled over' soon felt like writing overkill, and along with typos: 'he' should have been 'her', 'too' should have been 'to', misused italics, missing spaces, by the end of the story, although I enjoyed it, I didn't really 'feel' the story since I was rolling my eyes too often at over used expressions.

I would still very much recommend this story to others.

The iPhone app didn't offer the publisher, so I did some googling. (well, actually goodsearching I found a reviewer Greg Howley that said it was for sale at Lulu but the link didn't work. This might explain why I couldn't find a publisher in the book copyright section, and it explains why so many typing errors made it through to the final copy since Lulu is a self publish site and writers are on their own for proofing.

From this point, Lonnie can only get better and I'd certainly be open to reading what he writes in the future. I suspect his next story will be better proofed, or some wise publisher make pick up his story. For $5 it was worth it. I wouldn't pay the $17.05 I saw on Amazon

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